The ‘danger’ of writing in first person

When talking about point of view (POV) and writing in first person, inevitably someone will bring up that it’s OK, as long as ‘it’s done well’ and that ‘it’s not for beginning writers’. Invariably also people can’t quantify what is meant by these statements and the sentiment against writing in first person is merely described as ‘I don’t like it’. Well, that doesn’t help the writer very much, because if it can be ‘done well’, just what constitutes ‘well’ and what ‘not so well’.

After seeing a lot of published and unpublished first person stories, I have some thoughts about this. Feel free to comment.

First person tends to be very voice-y

How I got this injury, Doc? Well you’re not going to believe this but we were in the undercover car park and there was this dude, who, you know, didn’t like me parking in his spot and so he honks at me, and gets out of the car and starts swearing, like, you know, half the words I never heard before. So I got out. He was massive, man, massive, and I was just standing there, trying to back away, except my butt was already against the passenger side of my car and I had nowhere else to go. And then Josh, idiot that he is, decided to wind down the window, and so I fell with my butt through the fucking window and into his coffee.

Obviously this character needs a good kick up the behind. He suffers from over-use of certain words, and he’s hands-up-it-wasn’t-my-fault kind of whiny. Do I really want to spend a whole book with this guy? I fear it will get annoying very quickly.

First person can be very meandery-talky

I grew up in the country where we never had the opportunity to learn music, so when I first saw a French Horn I thought it looked like a demented trumpet. I was twenty-two at the time, and awkward, shy and very much like a country bumpkin. But my best friend played in this orchestra and asked me to join. At the time, I could barely tell one end of the trumpet from another, but he said that didn’t matter. I got lessons. My teacher Sophie was the craziest person I’ve ever met. Apart from the French Horn, she also played the piano and was an accomplished artist. She lived in an old house in the Inner West, shared with four other students. This is how I met Dave…

Yeah, yeah, blah, blah already. This life history continues for two pages into the story and nothing has happened except a meandering recount of some person’s life. I’ve lost interest.

First person can be distant

In the first example, because the story is narrated, rather than presented in real time, the author puts a filtering layer between story and reader, namely the opinions and interjections of the first person narrator. It’s not that you couldn’t do this in third person, but it’s more instinctive to do this in first person.

Basically, if you end up narrating instead of presenting a story in real time, you tend to over-describe and lose tension. Sometimes the gained flavour of the character’s voice is worth it, but I suspect that any character who sounds like a standard teenager or uneducated lout ends up annoying a lot of readers long before the end of the book. In similar fashion, a character who just waffles on about something while the story’s setting is devoid of action or setting in the here and now will bore a lot of readers.

So, if ‘not done well’ equates the above examples, ‘done well’ is the point where you insert some voice but stop short of large slabs of meandering and narrating and lecturing.


  1. Great points. I write 1st person, present tense. Talk about difficult. Using “I” too much will also kill the flow of the story. Another thing is jumping out of 1st and becoming omniscient. I don’t care if it is past, present or future, you can’t know what someone else is thinking or feeling…period…end of discussion. This limits the writer but can be a wonderful ride if the rules are remembered and creative methods are used. Or this is my take on it. =)

  2. I write almost exclusively in 1st person and present tense because I like the seamless flow between internal thoughts and action.

    It is limiting though: You can’t head hop and you can’t foreshadow, because you can’t use anything the main character doesn’t know.

    I think whatever you’re used to becomes the most comfortable.

  3. I use first-person if the story has one strong self-centered character, and not too much dialogue. (Yaknow: “The Catcher in the Rye”). Otherwise, I stick with third-person, because it’s more convenient, stays out of the way, and you can kill the viewpoint character with less work (always an important consideration).

    The Big Question is: third-person limited or omniscient. That’s where things can go horribly awry.

  4. I love writing in first person, and many of my stories are in first, like my WOTF winning story. But the things I have noticed above are issues that are particularly insidious in first person.

  5. In four novels I had never tried first person. Scared me to death to even try, despite my agent wanting me to tell the story in my fourth novel that way. So, as a mystery be definition limits point of view anyway (else there is no “mystery,” right?), I decided to finally give it a try.

    Right now, that story is out to my beta readers (and the one review I’ve gotten back is very positive, but I have two more to go). Then, after one more rewrite using comments received, it’s due at my agent not later than October 27.

    Sure hope I got it right (or is that, “got it write,” being as I’m an author?). At least I didn’t make any of the mistakes listed above, so here’s hoping that I did okay with it.

    Still scares me to death, though.

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  7. Thanks. I’m slowly going to copy everything across.

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